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Post by Psjunkie » Sat Jun 09, 2018 2:37 am

any thoughts on either image......
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Post by PietFrancke » Sat Jun 09, 2018 3:12 am

I don't dislike what you have done, perhaps get rid of a couple of the white splotches that are really further in the background than the painting suggests. I miss the boys at the fence watching intently.. I like the way the trees, ground, close fence have been handled, the secondary fences behind though created a plastic type feel that I don't care for. I have mixed feelings about the ball on the ground in the painting - I see it, want to look at it, find it interesting in its roundness and in its placement dead center between the boys - but it isn't the subject, so it is hurting the composition. The people at the fence just don't read as people enough, perhaps back down the effect there a little... I don't know, I like the people behind the catcher, but not the ones to the right of the batter.

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Post by Psjunkie » Sat Jun 09, 2018 3:17 am

good observations...thank you

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Post by davechinn » Sat Jun 09, 2018 9:58 am

Psjunkie wrote:
Sat Jun 09, 2018 2:37 am
any thoughts on either image......


First image: The extra baseballs at the catcher's feet and around the batter is a distraction and is an indication of batting practice rather than an actual game along with no umpire. However, sometimes at this level of baseball, the umpire could be behind the pitcher and also, could be a coach pitching rather than a kid. Just trying to put the image into perspective. The actual ball being pitched is rather hard to determine that it's actually a ball. I would remove it and use one of the other baseball's that's at the catchers feet and crop in a little more as in photo #2.

Second image: I'm in agreement with Piet. I like the process, but IMO, should be toned down some.
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Post by Psjunkie » Sat Jun 09, 2018 12:01 pm

Thanks for comment Mr. Chinn...understood

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Post by St3v3M » Sun Jun 24, 2018 3:56 am

I agree with the above, and if I could I would move the ball closer to the batter making it easier to see.

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Post by Psjunkie » Sun Jun 24, 2018 4:21 am

you must mean........agree with what's below....I see nothing above

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Post by St3v3M » Sun Jun 24, 2018 4:52 am

Psjunkie wrote:
Sun Jun 24, 2018 4:21 am
you must mean........agree with what's below....I see nothing above
On mine, I scroll up to see what's been written before, either way I agree with what everyone else wrote. S-
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