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Post by Psjunkie » Sun Jul 22, 2018 9:05 pm

It's great when your model does most of the work....any thoughts for improvement appreciated
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Post by PietFrancke » Sun Jul 22, 2018 10:41 pm

I like it - out of my skill set though... I'm no help -- I do have this thought, I don't like her being cut off at the elbow, I would "guess" crop in tighter or if you could have, capture more of her. Indeed she looks thoughtful, and for one so young, and in spite of the youthful dress, she looks sophisticated.

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Post by Psjunkie » Mon Jul 23, 2018 12:03 am

Thank you Piet for your observations....

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Post by minniev » Mon Jul 23, 2018 2:11 pm

Psjunkie wrote:
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It's great when your model does most of the work....any thoughts for improvement appreciated
She’s a beauty, and the soft gradations of tone work for the image. Good modeling too, with that little tilt of the head! I do think I’d either crop in further to the shoulders or back out more to include more of the arms/legs. The mix of cut off arms and knees is kind of confusing about what goes where.
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Post by Psjunkie » Mon Jul 23, 2018 2:59 pm

Understood..thank you for sharing your thoughts minniev

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Post by Duck » Tue Jul 24, 2018 12:24 am

I'll take it in another direction even though I'm really not a portrait guy, but maybe it'll be food for thought. This also comes from my own personal idiosyncrasies.

When I interact with my grandkids (no camera involved), whether it's playing or giving them a hug, I prefer to be face to face with them. I'll pick them up to hug them just so their face is at the same level as mine. When we lock eyes there is a personal connection occurring between us and I love that closeness. If they misbehave... that's a different story and I'll purposely put myself above them. Straightens them out real quick. They don't like seeing "Pappy Duck" get upset at them. :x (Gotta love that age.)

I feel this particular image had the potential to be a more intimately connected portrait had the angle of view been lower, on an equal level between viewer and subject. It wouldn't have ruined the mood, just enforced the intimacy a little more.

Of course, as with any image, there is a lot that could be explored, for example; instead of capturing her from the front (eye level or not) a different story could be told by taking a photo of her from behind and a little further away. The melancholic daydreamy feel would have been stronger.

While there is nothing 'wrong' with this image (it is what it is) and it's technically okay, it does offer a good amount of "in hindsight" and that is a useful teaching tool. Or, as they say, "once you stop seeing things wrong in your own images that's when you stop growing as an artist."

It's a great image. Turn it into a wallpaper for your computer and create a slideshow of them.
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Post by Psjunkie » Tue Jul 24, 2018 12:52 am

totally understand Duck and agree....most all my images are candidly caught, so for the most part I am lucky to get what I get..this one easily could have gotten away, as you know they're rarely still...

Thank you for your in depth reply.

Here's one that my speak more to your point of face to face that I'm not finished working on...
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Post by Duck » Tue Jul 24, 2018 1:57 pm

Psjunkie wrote:
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Here's one that my speak more to your point of face to face that I'm not finished working on...
While nothing wrong with the other image, this one does present a stronger connection with the viewer.

Yep, I compelling understand the need to "grab it when the opportunity presents itself". My four year old grandson is seldom in the same place for more than a few minutes. But if you go into the capture with a few principles in mind, the chances of walking away with a stronger image increase.

I love this second image. It still has that pensive feel while connecting to me, as a viewer. It's as if I interrupted a moment. Awesome.
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Post by PietFrancke » Tue Jul 24, 2018 2:50 pm

really like where you are going with that last one!

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Post by davechinn » Tue Jul 24, 2018 8:10 pm

Lovely capture with both images. The second one has got to be a favorite !!!
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